Todays feedback session returned the following outline:

Scene 1 – Boot Camp by: A.

Takes Aways:

1. Ensure Aaron (and teams’) bodily position effectively engage the crowd.
2. Ensure ranks are clearly establish via two sets of dialogue: Aaron to Andrew; Aaron to Antonio & Issa.
3. When running, mime a circle, a song, exhaustion, etc. (AND – as an extension of #1) keep the audience in mind.
4. Andrew must be wearing his jacket.

Transition – Sounds of battle, light down, flickering.

Scene 2 – Death by: I.

1. Music?
2. Ensure that the quotes used from the poems are spread out. i.e. Antonio will share his quote at the end of Scene 2; Aaron will share his in Scene 3; Andrew will share his in Scene 4.
3. Ensure Andrew’s distance is at a maximum from the group.

Transition – Other poems, and Aaron freshens up.

Scene 3 – Funeral by. Aa.

1. Use a freeze frame during conflict, instead of moving off stage.
2. The funeral scene should have a faster clip than the death scene, when dealing with the jacket. Crisp.

Transition – Light funeral music (perhaps military funeral), and Andrew Monologue

1. Light bar music
2. Acknowledging the ghost via comedy: empty shot-glass, moved glass, etc.

Scene 4 – Reunion by. A.